This is quite a bit darker than my usual work. 

     I wouldn't call it "dark". Evil maybe, but not dark.

This story contains violence and adult concepts. I don't really consider it
a 'drakfic', but don't read it, if you think it might upset you.

The other, unnamed character, is my creation. If you want to use him, go
right ahead. I sure won't.

     And anyone else will be able to after what happened?

	The older chick with the long has got it. She's holdin' it straight for
my gut. Now the chick is scared, like her face says she don't know how to use
it, but her hands are working like she's been a knife fighter longer'n me.
Then I hear it.

     All the practice in the kitchen? :P

     Bleh. Didn't really like the story. Well written for a character-eye
look from a would-be rapist, but just not something I really "enjoyed."

I used fairly rough language on the part of the rapist, because I felt it
was appropriate. If anybody thinks that a more formal style would suit this
story better, don't hesitate to let me know.

     Nope. Since you came from a 1st person view, it works with the rough
language.

The rapist wasn't meant to represent any real person, or any kind of
person. Any sterotyping is completely invalid. I'm an equal opportunity
villian crafter.

     Hehehehe! I like that last line. :P
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Ben Kosse bmk7411@cs.rit.edu
BGC Otaku and worshipper of the Red-Eyed Goddess. Member of ShAS.
Anime, RPG's, computers, poetry (read/write), music (listen/compose).
Author of the Bubblegum Crisis theme pack (see the homepage below).
Homepage with anime and other interests. (http://www.rit.edu/~bmk7411)