Some questions for anyone who has read this story:

1. Akane: Was she in character? I'm particularly concerned about part
four. If she wasn't, what should she have said/done differently?

2. Was the sequence of events in this alternate reality a believable
one? If not, where did it fail?

3. How well did the series-of-flashbacks format work in telling the
story?

Any answers to these would be helpful to me with this and future
stories. Thanks, 			Gary

Gary Kleppe
kleppe@execpc.com, Home page http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe
My fanfics and the FFML map are on my comics/manga page,
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