My style is extremely unstable at the moment, but I still think that

mixing tenses:



    "This is the worst he had ever been."



is not the best way to have been putting it.  (This will definitely

require a second pass)



The seduction of Kasumi is important, (it leads directly to my

conclusion.  Which is now in sight, thank goodness ;-), but I guess I

could make it a lot more subtle. (It would increase the shock value in

chapter omega minus one or two when this comes back.  Oh, yeah, that's

what happened back in chapter six, I get it now!)



This Akane is a "blue" akane. (I'm mixing in Mercury, B-ko and Ukyou,

another reason why Ukyou won't appear and Nabiki has a very small part).



The pun action is avoided, BECAUSE my take on the brainwashing involves

creeping disinterest.  (I wanted to put in a part where Shampoo is

holding P-chan at supper and Ranma objects, so she hands the pig to

Akane and says she's made it go away.)



Janken: "The game of `paper, scissors, stone'"  (This is yet another

Sailor Moon S reference that everyody's overlooked!)



Did Shamp leave a note?  What, has she become literate or something?

(Again, important plot point.  Collect them all.)



	Henry J. Cobb	hcobb@slip.net          http://www.io.com/~hcobb

    The Cobb-unit is beginning to sketch out that "Ukyou as Ranma" fic.

    Be afraid, be very afraid.