Subject: Re: [FFML] [FF] Magic, Part 3 of 8 : Arrivals and Departures
From: David M Lerman
Date: 8/28/1996, 1:37 AM
To: fanfic@fanfic.com

  I can see what Richard is trying to do in this episode. The problem is with
  the Inspector's reaction is that her hard-nose attitude isn't believable.
Nouma
  would realize that something is wrong. A police inspector does NOT threaten a 
  party that includes 
    - the daughter of the Chinese ambassador to the US, herself a diplomat
    - the husband and children of "the savior of the world"
    - a husband and wife who define the term "power couple" 
    - a internationally prominent entrepreneur and restauranteur 
  and, assuming Ranma is known in the sports world,
    - the best living martial artist.

  Also, although a nice character point is made, I don't see the plans
described 
  as being sufficient to cut by half the personal fortune of Nabiki, who 
  is probably one of the wealthiest people in Japan, i.e. a billionaire. 
  In addition, I would expect a welcoming party of local company reps and local
  officials eager to help someone who has probably been profiled in every major
  business publication.

                                                      TTFN,
                                                      dml