Numbski wrote:

<Since what?  What the heck happened?> He looked around and found himself in a very
sterile environment, white seemed to be the predominant theme surrounding him. 

Maybe "White seemed to be..." should be a seperate sentence?

"That still doesn't mean you couldn't have told me."  She was still crying, this
sharp remark came from the absolute bitterness she was feeling.  Ranma and Ryouga
had dishonored her and made a fool out of her.  She was so embarassed. There were

embarrassed

"I was bound by my stupid honor Akane.  I didn't like it.  You saw how much I
abused P-chan and how much I tried to keep him away from you.  Now you understand
why I acted the way I did."  He to had now broken down into tears.  They embraced

He too had

"Hey sis, can I talk to ya for a sec?"  It was Nabiki.  Leave it to her to interupt

interrupt

a sensitive moment. 

"Uh, could you wait a minute Nabiki, I..."  She was cut off by a yell from
downstairs. 

Suddenly, everything around them began to crash and burn.... 

*******

Interesting that Akane's and Ranma's dreams had so many common
elements. Maybe they're developing a kind of subconscious link. If so,
it's bad for our little pig friend.

<Whoa.> Ranma thought to himself as he lay there in bed.  Things were starting to
come back to him.  The blast, where had it come from, and why?  The ceiling had
caved in on top of them, but for the life of him he couldn't piece it together. 

Well, of course not! He's not trained in ceiling repair! (heh)

His head was bandaged, and he had inumerous wires and tubes running from him. 

I think you mean "numerous".

Finally, someone would be able to answer his questions.  A nurse walked in to check
on him, seeming somewhat startled to see him awake. 

"Mr. Saotome, how are you feeling?"  She tryed to look as normal as possible to

tried

The cold feeling continued up his body.  Finally, just as the doctor and someone
that looked like they were in a police officer's uniform walked into the room, he

like he was, or like she was

The school bell rang, dismissing the students for the day.  As all days go at
Furinkan, it was expected that Kunou Tatewaki would try once more to win the
affections of the "pig-tailed goddess" and Tendo Akane from that vile sorceror

I believe "sorcerer" is the correct spelling.

At least these were in the inner workings of Kunou's mind anyway. 

those were

"You JERK!  How could you let Ukyou just hang all over you like that? Right in
front of the entire school?"  Akane was already glowing a light blue, this was a
pretty fast manifestation.  If one didn't know better, you'd think she actually

Either "you" should be "one", or "one" should be "you", so that they
match, if you know what I mean.

##Two Hours Earlier##

Ranma is sitting in class looking absently out the window, and seems to be

was sitting... and seemed to be

fidgeting with something in his pocket.  Nabiki is sitting next to him, and Ukyou

was sitting

is sitting two rows over, with Akane sitting in front of her. 

was sitting

"Hey loverboy, when are you going to tell her?"  Nabiki look at him with an amused

looked

look on her face.  She was enjoying the harassment she was giving Ranma, and knew
that he could do nothing about it, except change his facial colour to something

color

closely matching that of his favorite silk shirt. 

"I dunno, I haven't found the right time."  The object Ranma has been fidgeting
with now moves out of Ranma's pocket into his hand, just in view of Ranma and

moved

"Tendo Nabiki, how is it that you go and place your hand in that cur Saotome's
pants?"

Hmmm... assuming that this is Nabiki's dream, what is her subconscious
saying to her here? ;-)

He looked at her, almost unwilling to know why she would commit such an attrocity. 

atrocity

However curiousity got the best of him in the end, and his pocketbook was opened

curiosity

Reaching in and taking out what she considered to be a fair price, she returned to

There goes the family fortune, Kuno baby. :-)

"Yes, there is something I want in fact."  She pulled out a callendar, and looked

calendar

it over thouroughly.  "What are you doing tomorrow early evening?" Kunou was

thoroughly

Nabiki was lying peacefully in a white sheeted bed.  Upon looking around, one can

one could

see her sister Akane lying directly across from her.  Akane, however has been

had been

strapped down to her bed. 

Nabiki rolled over, moaning just a little incoherently.  After listening closer... 

That last bit seems a little clumsy. Maybe "If one could listen
closer, one could hear..." would be better.

Well, that's all for part 3.  Have you caught what has actually happened, and what
is only the imagination of those involved?  Did Nabiki ask out Kunou?  It wouldn't

Nah, she can do better.

It's getting very interesting. Soon we'll see the characters wake up
and try to deal with all the things their subconscious minds have been
trying to tell them.

I wouldn't want to work in that hospital, though, when all of Ranma's
friends find out where he is. I'm surprised they haven't trashed the
place already, fighting over who gets to visit him first.

Gary

Gary Kleppe
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