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Subj:    Re: [FFML] Prose vs Script
Date:    96-12-16 03:09:41 EST
From:    Chihokodan
To:      fanfic@fanfic.com

In a message dated 96-12-15 20:48:45 EST, you write:

Prose 
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(Ranma is running from Akane)

        "Ranma!!!  You baka!!!!!  C'mere, you!!"  

        "So you can hit me again!?  No way, Akane!!"


Actually, I would have it as:

"Ranma!!! You baka!!! C'mere, you!!" screamed Akane as she chased after Ranma
with her mallet in hand.

"So you can hit me again!?  No way, Akane!!" yelled back a fleeing Ranma.

But seriously, I'm curious if people really do feel that script form is the
best medium for fast action and rapid dialogue.  I think I fall into the
catergory of fast action/dialogue, but I've only used prose form.  I guess I
dabble with thoughts and a few more emotional stuff here and there, but
action was predominant in Ranma/SM.  I was and still am very happy with the
finished product, but being a new fanfic writer, I'm always looking for
expansion.  Honestly, the biggest problem I have with prose is finding new
ways of saying "says, yells, screams, seethes, hisses, etc." before I start
using the same words too much.  So... do people feel script form tells a more
succinct and smooth story for action/dialogue oriented fanfics?

Jya Ne
Shiaw Chi "Hokodan"
chihokodan@aol.com