On Sat, 14 Dec 1996 18:39:53 -0600 (CST), Numbski
<ashadwic@panther.greenville.edu> wrote:

Ranma 1/2:  Dreams and Memories
By:  Numbski

Legal Stuff:  All these characters were created by Rumiko Takahashi and I
therefore take no credit for them.  All I did was place a hypothetical
situation upon them.

It was just another typical morning around the Tendo household.  Ranma and
his father were out early doing their morning training exercises trying to
knock each other into the carp pond, thus winning the match.  Ranma has
been doing

Ack! "had been doing". Stick to one tense please. (Same applies
throughout.)

Ranma-chan never had a prayer.  One hit and he was pounded into the
ground.  Out cold.  Akane stormed back into the house while Mr. Panda
looked at his son thoughfully.  After a nice long look he picked

thoughtfully

Ranma-chan up off the ground and drags her back into the house.  Kasumi
had breakfast ready by this time and noticing the condition of the
Saotomes (as if this is unusal somehow) walk back into the kitchen and

unusual

comes back with two kettles of warm water.

Just an ordinary day in the lives of our heroes...

*******

Breakfast seem to go without any major disruptions.  Ranma came to and he
and Genma had a food war trying to steal each other's breakfast.  It was,
in fact, unusally quiet.  Ranma suddenly realized why after he was done

unusually
[snip]

The three took this opportunity to make themselves scarce, and since none
of them actually SAW Ranma in her room, they figured that nothing would
happen anyway.  At this Akane closed the door and walked back into the
room.  "I can't believe the people around here!  What kind of
nerve...huh?"  She looked around, and there's no Ranma.  "Ranma...?"

"Psst.  Out here!"  She turned around to see Ranma haning upside down in

hanging

"What was it you wanted to talk about?"  Akane now took on a bit of a
quizzical expression.  She found it extremely amusing that Ranma hadn't
smarted off to her yet, and had the cunning not to get caught in front of
their parents."

I think the last " is a typo.

"Then why did you make that comment to your father then Ranma?"  Now SHE
wasn't sure what to think.

"I didn't want to sound like I wasn't confident to my father.  That was a

A little clumsy. How about something simpler, like "I didn't want my
father to think I wasn't confident."

stupid thing to say to me anyway.  Who else WOULD Happosai choose for an
heir anyway?  It's bad enough he's a pervert, and he would never give the
school over to a girl."

"I dunno about that, if a girl gave him what he wanted..."  She stood
there with stupid grin on her face, nearing an evil smirk.  "he might just
give it over to a girl SPECIFICALLY."

He'd give something over, all right, but it wouldn't be the dojo...
;-)

"Look, I think it's time we quit this stupid game our parents are
playing."  Ranma finally got out after he regained his composure.  "This
whole engagement thing needs to be either accepted by us or done away with
so that our parents can know who is going to carry on this school.  If we
don't want to do it together, then one of us will do it with whomever we
marry, and that needs to be decided soon."

Akane was taken aback by this suden show of seriousness on Ranma's part.

sudden

"Well, we have tried to get married once already.  I think the decision is
mostly on you r shoulders, I mean I tried to find out whether or not you

your

wanted this, and if you um,...."  She didn't quite know how to put it.

"Ranma!  What do you think you're doing??!!!"  Ranma looked down at this,
wincing in pain.  He noticed that he and Akane WERE sitting kind of close,
and in close enough that things could happen that would cause Ryouga major
blood loss through the nasal cavity.

That usually seems to happen only if HE gets close to a woman.

"NOOOOO!!!!!"  Ryouga was on top of Ranma by now, slamming him to the
ground, right onto the injury he had already sustained.  "I won't let you
take her away!"  Ryouga came down with a hard right to Ranma's face.  

He's being awfully careless about exposing his feelings to Akane...

"Ryouga, PLEASE!"  She couldn't believe what she was hearing. <I won't let
you take her away?  I was never his to take, was I?>  She started to run
toward him, but just then Ranma managed to get a bearing and flipped
Ryouga off of him and the roof right toward the carp pond.  Akane looked

Pretty careless of him again...

on somewhat in disbelief as Ryouga didn't climb out of the pond, and
P-chan struggled his way to land.

"P-chan! Ryouga fished you out of the pond! How considerate!" Uh...
no?

"P-chan?  Ranma, that's not Ryouga....oh God Ranma...."  She was so upset
suddenly that she coudn't control her emotions. This had all happened so

couldn't

quickly.

"Wha.." She didn't have time to react.  Suddenly Ranma's arms exploded in
a bloody mess with blades protruding out the bottom in a similar manner to
that of the weapons Mousse used in his first fight with Ranma.  He lunged
forward making two deep wounds in Akane's torso.

Ah, it's a dream, isn't it... it's a bloody dream...

P-chan was now staring in a disbelief.  Ranma was so bent on revenge
against him that he was willing to kill the only one Ryouga loved?  P-chan
began to glow a dark blue and was starting to swell with a dark red aura.

Red and blue at the same time?

The local authorities had arrived to survey the damages.  The Tendo home
and training hall had been nearly destroyed from a blast that came from
within the house.  The enire household had been injured and were rushed to

entire

*******
	It was just another typical morning around the Tendo household.
Ranma and his father were out early doing their morning training exercises
trying to knock each other into the carp pond, thus winning the match.
Ranma has been doing a very good job recently of winning the morning
spars, leaving Genma with few options to use against his son anymore.

Uh... didn't we do this?

"You're getting cocky Ranma." Genma managed to land behind Ranma and land
a counter blow to his back.  "If you keep this up, you'll never become a
good heir to this school."

Doctor, I have this terrible feeling of deja vu!

"Ranma!!!"  Ryouga had jumped down from the fence and was charging at him.
Of course since Ryouga has a bad habit of warning his opponent of his
attack, Ranma had no problems getting out of the way of this.  "How dare
you insult Akane like that!?  I won't allow you to talk about her that
way!!!"

OK, let's see now, if this is a dream too, whose is it? Hmmm...

Ryouga waited for the two to disengage as he looked on in horror.  Then
Ranma turned around to approach him.  "So buddy, about that best man..."

Ryouga darted at Ranma, screaming something completely unintelligable.

unintelligible
[major snip]

I don't know if this is the end of part 1 or not.  I haven't decided how
I'm going to divide this up.  Over christmas I'll have more time to work
on it.  Comments and suggestions are most welcome!

This story has some intriguing possibilities, but... I'm confused.

OK, so the first part was all Ryouga's dream. Was the part about him
demolishing the dojo real? Then why is everything back to normal in
the second part? Is the second part another dream? Or have we backed
up in time here? Is this part showing us the real events that inspired
the dream?

Maybe this will all be made somewhat clearer later, but for now it's
pretty murky... at least *I* don't get it.

Gary
Gary Kleppe
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