Here's some comments, for what they're worth:

You have to believe we are magic;
Nothing can stand in our way.
You have to believe we are magic;

<snip>

I'll bring all your dreams alive
For you.

There's something very strange about people who use an old Olivia
Newton-John song from a bad movie as a pre-story quote ; )   (the only thing
stranger might be people who recognize the source material <g> )

"Tendo-san, the CEO is arriving in a few minutes to see you."

Nouma's eyebrows rose.  What did the CEO want with him?  Nouma grimaced; he
could guess.

Ranma took Akane's family name?  (I peeked ahead to make sure he was their
kid ;)  Nice touch of realism (as I understand Japanese customs, anyway) --
I'm sure Hitomi will comment if this isn't quite correct :)

Nouma used his legs to put a scissors hold on Ranma's stomach, at the same
time trying to give him an uppercut to the jaw.  Father pulled his head back,
grabbed Nouma's shirt, and quickly rolled, slamming Ranma to the mat.

Shouldn't that be, 'Father pulled his head back, grabbed Nouma's shirt, and
quickly rolled, slamming Nouma to the mat.' ?

"You chose to lead that kind of life, Pop!  You coulda
ended the curse, you coulda led a normal life.  Instead, you decided you 
wanted to spend you life fighting all sorts of strange stuff all over the
world.

'...you wanted to spend YOUR life fighting...'  (unless Nouma's mangling the
language)


Nice start. 






Jeanne Hedge

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