Read part one, made comments which hopefully got through at some
point.  So here we go with part 2...
        First off it's nice to see the old cast together even if it appears
to be temporary.  Some I feared wouldn't appear at all.  Interesting how
important some of the people are, I'm pleased to see it's restricted to
extentions of previous TIL stories.  I probably couldn't take it to see
everybody that way, Kodachi is slowly becoming my favorite in this series.
I found it a bit odd how little interaction there was between Kodachi and
Kuno, but much of the past 25 years are unknown at this point.
        Nouma is still bothering me, adding a gold medal to the list?  All
I like about him is his interaction with Kodachi, I still think he's over
the top.
        Ryouga's sons... Kouichi appears to be the younger son but his name
would indicate otherwise.  I don't want to see another Japanese debate on
something but from what I remember names like that are given to firstborn.
        The Kuno-speak could use a little work.
        Kikuko, hard to picture but interesting concept.  Nice name choice
as well.  If she studied under Tofu at all I find it hard to picture her as
using an agressive style, perhaps something along the lines as a defensive
yet powerful style.
        About Ukyou's restaurants... add one in Hawaii, it would probably
do real well here.  ^_^

Nouma shook his head, laughing.  "Don't play the stricken maiden with me,
Auntie.  I think your husband and daughter are just as glad to see you as I
am."

        This confuses me in regard to Kodachi's family?

"All of you here know about my curse."  She looked down at herself.  Nouma, of
course, didn't think of his father's female side as being attractive, but all

        What brings this subject up?  Nouma thinking about how he doesn't
consider his father's female side attractive.  Why 'of course'?

Nouma looked into her eyes, bringing his eyebrows slightly closer together.
"Enough, Aunt Kodachi."  He had always enjoyed bantering with her, but she
went too far this time.  He was letting her know that there were some lines
she shouldn't cross.

        What was the line that she crossed?  I'm unclear on this point.
Btw, why is it Tendo Nouma and not Saotome Nouma?

        Anyway, that's about all I have to say for the time being.  Hope to
see more of this in the near future.  I'll save the rest of my comments for
later chapters... I'd like to see how things will turn out first.

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