On Sun, 1 Dec 1996 16:51:55 -0800 (PST), Jeff Rutsch
<jdrutsch@ucdavis.edu> wrote:

Hey.  This should be my final send of this before posting this to
RAAC.  I'd just like to give it a once-over to the list.  I'd really
appreciate all C&C.

Well, it's not "Mota airen." It's Wo de airen. Wo=I/me, de=possessive
= wo de = mine, plus airen = spouse.

Probably not the kind of comment you were looking for, but I can't
find much to comment on. It was well-written and entertaining as
always. I liked the story about Soun's wife. I do wonder how Shampoo
knew so much about Ranma's relationships with Nabiki and Ukyou.

And any good ideas for a title?

Well, you've based the titles of previous chapters of TORN on the Viz
anime episode titles. So how about:

Shampoo, the Gung-Ho Girl

or

Ranma and Nabiki: 2-gether 4-ever?

Gary

Gary Kleppe
kleppe@execpc.com, http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe