Subject: Re: [FFML] [TPOH1-5] _For you beta collecters out there_ or _This stuff is DELETED_
From: bastian@enterprise.mathematik.uni-essen.de (Sebastian Weinberg)
Date: 11/29/1996, 2:56 PM
To: Fanfiction ML

 On Tue, 26 Nov 1996 22:10:31 -0600 (CST) RPM - acct 3/5 wrote:

:    "And I just wanted t'say... I love you, man!"
:    Ryouga edged a little away from Ranma, staring at his rival with
: bulging eyes.
: 
:    Then realization hit him.
: 
:    "Ranma, you're not getting my okonomiyaki."

WAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAAAAA!  ROTFLOL!  :D :D :D :D

Don't you *dare* cut this out.


There are lots of funny and interesting moments in this.  I
chuckled, grinned and laughed a lot while reading this.  The only
fault I can see offhand is that it lacks a little direction;  It
seemed to be just random things happening one after another, with
the occasional glimpses of a plot shining through.  If you want to
rip this all apart and rewrite it from scratch that's okay, but
it's not half as bad as you made it out to be in the front note.

I'm moving on to parts 6-8 now.


Sebastian
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