On Wed, 27 Nov 1996 08:02:29 -0600 (CST) Matthew Trotter wrote:
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: Escape From Nerimia
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: Part seven: Akuna Matata
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: It means no worries
: For the rest of your days
: -like I know who wrote that
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: "Glad your feeling better today, Nabiki."
"you're"
: Akane was looking around, it would have been too late for her, if not
: to the snow covered rock a few steps back.
I'm not quite sure, but shouldn't that be "if not *for* the rock"
: Some she was saving for collage, but most she had
: to spend on her family.
A money collage? You mean like... clipping out all the heads from
the bills and gluing them down to make a crowd scene and stuff
like that? Weird.
: He
: smiled, it was easy to look at another's life,
Run-on sentence. Make the first comma a semicolor or full stop.
: "You don't even know what I said do you?"
: "I know I'm beautiful, Kuno baby, but you don't have to drool. Are
: you paying attention to me? You aren't are you. I don't know why I
: bothered even talking to you."
: She blinked, and looked astonished.
It took me two readings to get what was going on here. You should
make clearer that Kunou is repeating her words in the second
paragraph. Either by narration like ", Kunou repeated word perfect"
or by putting single quotes around the words he repeats, like you
did in the next paragraph.
: She stared at him, after a little bit he began to feel self contious.
"self conscious"
: "It appears to be an inherited trait of my family. Perhaps one of
: the only useful traits I seem to have picked up.
I don't think that the word "only" fits here.
: "Tetewaki, everyone feels crazy sometimes. I don't think your any
: crazier than the rest of us.
"you're"
: I used to think you were, but after this
: vacation, I think your about the sane as the rest of us."
"you're"
: damn. It wasn't Ranma's fault.
: That had never mattered before, but now . . .it was no use, the author
: was probably one of those people who thought that he and Ranma ought to
: be buddies(UGGGH).
<@bap> leave that fourth wall standing, ya dope, lest ye be
buried beneath the wreckage.
: [3] Your on a pair of skis. The real question is, where are the skis?
"You're"
Sebastian