RPM - acct 3/5 wrote:

I sat down, I looked at it.  I mulled.  I mulled more.

I decided that it needed MAJOR MAJOR MAJOR MAJOR work.

One of my pre-readers thought it couldn't be that bad.
I sent it to him.  I proved him wrong. >:)

I proved several other pre-readers wrong too. ^_^

Yeah, this is nothing to be proud about, but hey, I'd rather make it right
than make it rushed.  I'll say this much, parts 6-8 are DEFINITELY not
going to be redone.  They're nearly just about right, with just a touch of
polish needed.

THEREFORE, this, parts 1-5 of The Pursuit of Happiness,
is going to be DELETED.  Flushed.  Gone.  Ka-putzky.
Well, okay, elements of it I *AM* keeping, but 70% of
this stuff is going to be deleted once I post this.

WHY am I deleting this?  The characterization, the situations,
alot of it is forced or rushed.  It just needs SO many things altered.

BUT, White Wolf told me that I really oughta put this to the FFML, at the
very least, before it becomes cyber-dust.  Well, even though I am putting
this to the ffml, it IS gonna be cyber-dust.

I understand there's a few of you out there that... well... 'collect' beta
versions of fics.  Enjoy! =)  'cause after this posting, this thing is
history.  (Well, most of it.)

What, you mean it gets BETTER?????

Oh NO, I'm still recovering from this version, I was up till MIDNIGHT
reading it, muffling sniggers...  not muffling laughs....

Fixed grin...

Oh well, Two, Two Two for the price of one!

MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

BTW, if you hadn't gathered, I loked it lots!  Serious C&C once I
recover.

-- 
Barry Cadwgan ( BCADWGAN@FL.NET.AU )
"The end does not justify the means.  
 The end is the sum of the means,
 as the road travelled determines the destination." 
Valijon Starbringer (Hellflower Trilogy, Eluki bes Shahar)