Subject: Re: [FFML] [Fanfic] Bakamoichigei #6
From: bastian@enterprise.mathematik.uni-essen.de (Sebastian Weinberg)
Date: 11/27/1996, 1:18 PM
To: Fanfiction ML

 On Sat, 23 Nov 1996 13:24:35 -0500 Caryll Griffin wrote:

: Bakamoichigei #6
: (Even a Fool Has One Talent)
: Caryll Griffin

: 	"P-Chan! Did you fall into the pond? I guess I'm going to
: have to give you a bath! I'm sure Akane won't mind!"

Uh oh.

: At the
: mention of a bath, Ranma and Ryoga's eyes widen. Ranma tries to
: snatch at P-Chan but Miyoko steps out of his reach. "Akane told me
: you were mean to P-Chan! Nice try Ranma!"

Uh oh!


: 	Holding P-Chan with one hand and the bucket with the
: other, she pours the bucket over her head. Standing up she shakes
: her hair and walks over toward the tub. P-Chan desperately tries
: to escape but it's no use. Miyoko steps into the tub and slides
: down in the water sighing. She holds P-Chan above the water at eye
: level and kisses him on the nose. 
: 	He blushes and Miyoko slides underwater still holding him.
: P-Chan's change is quick.  Miyoko frantically tries
: to pull up out of the water to see what it is sitting in her lap
: that is much larger than P-Chan. Her eyes break the surface and
: she sits up. Ryoga quickly backs off of her lap, his face *bright*
: red. He pinches his nose trying to stop a nosebleed.

UH OH!


: 	"Well, I guess it's no secret that I like you, ne?"
: Ryoga's eyes widen as he remembers everything she's said to him as
: P-Chan. He blushes again.
: 	"D-Did you mean it? About the g-good kisser and b-being
: cute?" Miyoko grins. Ryoga looks up at her and gives her a
: lopsided nervous grin.
: 	"Hai! I meant every word I said!" Ryoga smiles and Miyoko
: gently slides over to where Ryoga's sitting, causing his eyes to
: widen even more. "Oh, calm down Ryoga! I'm not gonna do anything!
: You hentai!" She finishes with a smile. He relaxes a little bit.
: 	Miyoko sits up on her knees and kisses him. He kisses her

Awww, that's cute.  It's about time that Ryouga finds a nice girl
who likes him.  And I mean a *real* character and not a made-to-
fit, deus-ex-machina cardboard like Akari.  (Ooops, I think
Misa-chan will kill me now.)


: 	"Ooo! I hate this curse! If it wasn't for this curse I
: would have nailed that jerk Ryoga! It wasn't my fault I got
: distracted by a cat howling in the alley way! If-If I ever find a
: cure! No matter what it is...I'd take it in a heartbeat!" She
: growls several times in anger and walks back into the house.

Uh, this reads like you want to imply that there is a connection
between the curse and Ranma's cat phobia.  Better clarify that.


Very nice.  I hope there's nothing seriously wrong with Miyoko.

Oh, and please wrap the text before sending it, next time.


Sebastian
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