On Sat, 16 Nov 96 12:13:05 PST Lisa Prior said:
: Here you go folks, part three.
: SINS OF THE FATHER
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: CHAPTER THREE
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: LUNCH AT UKYO'S
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: OR
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: A LITTLE EXPLANATION
: Suteko shook her head. Poor kid. Four girls. What did Genma think
: he was doing? One fiancee was bad enough but put the attentions of
: four girls on one guy and all hell would break loose. "How did that
: happen? Is Ranma some type of Romeo?"
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: Ukyo spoke up quickly in Ranma's defense. "No! He isn't."
What is Ukyou getting so heated about? "Romeo" sounds like a
*compliment* to me. Now, if Suteko had said "Casanova" or "Don
Juan", *then* I could understand Ukyou's defensive tone.
: I hope you liked this. Any problems? I think it moves a little jerky but
: well it is a first draft.
I had no problems with the contents, but with the form. Please
don't use the dreaded "smartquotes" in texts you send here. Keep
it in ASCII, so everyone can read it without getting scrambled
characters on the screen.
As for the story, I like it and am waiting for more. :)
Sebastian