Subject: Re: [FFML] [Ranma Fanfic] A few little words, A few little problems (1/?)
From: bastian@enterprise.mathematik.uni-essen.de (Sebastian Weinberg)
Date: 11/20/1996, 12:06 PM
To: Fanfiction ML

 On Wed, 06 Nov 1996 22:13:16 -0500 Ben Kosse wrote:

:                   A few little words,
:                  A few little problems.

An interesting experiment.  I found the focus-shifting first-
person narration a little jarring at first, but once I got used to
it, it worked all right.  The story itself is well thought-out.  I
particularly like the fact that Ranma did not directly tell akane
that he loves her, but she finds out by accident when he tells
Shampoo.  Also the two "leftover" fiancees seeking consolation
with each other (Each in different ways) was a nice touch.


Sebastian
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