An intriguing opening! Ryoga with kami powers....the mind boglegs...

   Fairly well written. You had a irritating tendency to switch tenses;
you may want to clean that up. Also, you misspelled "Personnel"
repeatedly. Aside from that...crisp, well-thought dialogue, entertaning
plot....an excellent first fic.

   Hope to see more of this.

- Mike of No Particular Title or Handle
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