On Sat, 02 Nov 1996 20:49:58 -0500 Suds-kun wrote:

: Ranma 1/2 Fan Fiction
: "The High Cost of Loving - Chapter Two"
: "The Money Pit - Part Three"
: by Suds-kun (suds1964@tir.com)

Verry nice!

The over-the-top action and violence of Happousai and the sudden
contrast of the very realistic outcome were quite gripping. 
Suddenly people get *hurt*, people *bleed* - people die. 
Shampoo's reaction to a hurt Mousse was touching, and the
revelation of Cologne's schemes surprising, but logical.

That the fathers Tendou and Saotome could come up with a plan like
this is a little unlikely, though.  In your first draft, the
violence and attacks just *happened*, like they always seem to do
in the Ranmaverse.  Now they are pre-planned and arranged, and I'm
not sure that can be done.  We'll see how it works out.

Oh, and I wanna know what it was that Ranma always did with
Akane's used blocks! :)


Sebastian
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