Lisa Prior wrote:

Well here is the rewrite of the teaser.  Changed to past tense and
tightened a bit.  I have added the next section, which is a bit of an
explaination.  I am working on the explaination from Satsuko's
POV(Changed her name, still not sure it's right, any suggestions?"

Well on to it, presenting:

All characters copyright of Rumiko Takahashi, Shogakukan Inc. and
Viz Communications.

REVENGE FROM THE PAST

OR

GENMA GETS HIS!

by LPrior
(lprior@geocities.com)

<SNIP>

Green eyes met hers for a moment and the girl spoke her name.
“Satuko Saotome.”  She then leapt to the top of the wall and said one
last thing before she leapt away.  “Tell my father, I will return tomorrow
at dawn to finish this.”  Then she was gone.  Ranma and Akane tried to
follow but the girl had disappeared before they could get to the top of
the wall.  They continued over and searched for a few blocks.  After
several minutes they gave up and headed back to the Dojo.  As they
walked back, the began to talk.

<SNIP>

Next:  Satusko meets Ukyo and tells her side of the story.

bye Lisa

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First off, nothing much, but which is her name:  Satusko or Satuko?

Also, th tu letter combination in Roman-ji either does not exist, or is
used to make the tsu sound.  And in the case of the name Satusko, well,
an s in that place in not a posible combination in Japanese.

Umm, I hope I'm not telling you something you already know...

Anyways did I enjoyed your story.  Keep it up!

Magic Knight Kyone