Just wanted to say something to you guys on the list about this... 

This sorta C&C is what I need more of, please. =)  Be brutal, be harsh,
just tell me what needs to be fixed and don't be afraid to offend me. 
This guy (see comments below) points out quite a few flaws that I missed,
and I wanna know how you guys feel too, especially regarding the scenes
that I cut / subplots that I modified. 

-rpm

On Tue, 5 Nov 1996, Neil Reynolds wrote:

  I think that this version of the story sufferred from overediting. The
subplot of Akane finding out Mousse drugged them was removed, and
incompletely; some of the bits are there, but most aren't. I really
liked that part. 

if some bits were still hanging in, that was bad editing on my part.
Anyone that's followed my stuff can tell you I'm a lousy technical editor
(Right, Kevin?;)

  There are a couple of places where the wrong person is being
accredited with dialogue. One that sticks in my mind was in the epilogue
where Kodachi's dialogue has Ukyou's name attributed. 

ack, consider it fixed.

  The two tracks for the ending of the battle on the bridge were
confusing;  and worse, seemed contradictory. Ryo's revelation in
Ucchan's that he killed several people is gone. 

Not sure if I should make it common knowledge to them, or even how...
But as I said, if it helps the story, I'll do it.

And the dialogue around it also contains items of his family reunion
(and their spending spree)  which were better seperate.

Hrm... gonna havta work on that...