I'm sorry now that I didn't keep notes while reading the latest version of
this story. I only bothered to reread it, because I really liked it when I
read it before. I'd read it twice before, but it had been some time since I
had reread it.

  I think that this version of the story sufferred from overediting. The
subplot of Akane finding out Mousse drugged them was removed, and
incompletely; some of the bits are there, but most aren't. I really liked that
part.

  There are a couple of places where the wrong person is being accredited with
dialogue. One that sticks in my mind was in the epilogue where Kodachi's
dialogue has Ukyou's name attributed.

  The two tracks for the ending of the battle on the bridge were confusing;
and worse, seemed contradictory. Ryo's revelation in Ucchan's that he killed
several people is gone. And the dialogue around it also contains items of his
family reunion (and their spending spree) which were better seperate.

  If I had realized I had as much to say, I would have kept notes as I read.
Then my information could have been more specific, but I didn't think it would
have changed so much. I'd suggest getting an older copy from the remainder,
grep for differences, and look at those places carefully. It looks like a case
of the author knowing the story backwards and forwards, so they don't notice
when a piece is missing, cut, or damaged. 

  I still like the story, but I think that not all of the changes were for the
better, and that some of the revisions need to be checked for spelling.
						Neil Reynolds