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Bubblegum Collapse 4/5

Story 9.25:  Excellent.  I was wondering when the 'Capital' of the resistance 
(AD Police) was going to fall.  The fact that humans are about to die as a 
race is clearly presenting itself here, and the way you write puts doubts into 
my mind as to whether we will even win.

Characterizations 8.6: Good, I do, however, think we need a LOT more reaction 
from the rest of the Knight Sabers when Priss enters her final battle.

Grammar: 8.7: I dunno, I was too busy enjoying the story to bother with 
picking out grammatical errors, which means it couldn't have been that bad.

Descriptions 8.5:  Perhaps try to draw combat out a bit more. Describe the 
colors of the explosions, and the like.  Doing so creates a better atmosphere 
of war. As it is, great!

Overall: 8.7625 -- Cool!

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