Draxon Review Operating System... Online. Initiating Review of Bubblegum 
Collapse PT 3.

Story: 8.5  Nicely set up.  In the midst of the Knight Sabers Darkest hours we 
see them win, only to be overshadowed by larger losses elsewhere, just as you 
think your falling into a huge hole, Sylia comes up with something... 
Something that I think will shed some light on the situation... (If not, that 
was a nasty trick)

Characterizations: 8.7 Good.  You continue to convey the dark feeling of the 
fic well.  For every good thing that happens, something bad counters it.  This 
sets the stage for the eventual victory well...

Grammar: 8.3  Very minor errors. The second paragraph of Part 3 (not in the 
intro) is an example, with Christine asking a question. Three periods decided 
to take the place of the question mark.  Also, nothing seems to be used to 
indicate thoughts.  < or " are effective.

Descriptions: 8.4  I liked the way this worked out.  Somehow I still find the 
combat scenes a little under - described, but this could just be me. 

Overall: 8.475