James 'Jaymz' Cullen wrote:
 

Nope. I don't think so here. Akane doesn't strike me as afraid of things
like the dark, and lightning storms. Not to mention, you're assuming
that she's scared of these things 'because she's a girl'. Not a smart
move, considering you'll probably get most of the female members on this
list screaming for your blood.

 
	Okay.  Now let me see here.  Did you see how afraid Akane is in the
Tunnel of Lost Love?  If she is afraid of ghosts, it will make sense
that she is afraid of the darkness, right?  And yes part of my
assumption is based on 'she is STILL a girl'.  Akane is all energetic
and everything, but deep down she is a girl and still needs to be
protected.

Plus, Akane wouldn't be so bold as to suggest them sleep in the same
room, let alone the same bed, and she sure as heck wouldn't go giving
him a kiss. You seem to be saying that Akane's some weak little girl
who's scared of the dark, not the strong-willed, and independant girl
she is. That's a big no-no.

	I'll admit that the later part might be a little bit of stretch.  But,
the point of this is to show that she does have a weaker side as well,
not the strong-willed independent girl that she always appear to be.  
 

Plus, while Ranma might be supporting (assuming that Akane IS what
you're portraying her as, which she isn't), he wouldn't go suggesting
that Akane sleep on his lap.

 
	I'm trying to find some way to incorporate a nice theme with a very
limited amount of time.  I was thinking of something like she just fall
asleep, or something like that.  

Apart from these massive errors, it's a nice little story. But the fact
is, that Akane is NOT what you seem to think she is. Give the girl
credit, I mean, Akane's not gonna let the absense of light, and the
occasional lightning strike and thunder, frighten her. She's made of
tougher stuff than that, mate. I feel that that's one of her best
qualities.....

	Hmmm... remember the Shampoo mushroom story?  She was afraid to watch a
horror movie by herself, and was totally freaked out when Ranma scared
her.  I agree with you, but Akane is really not as strong as you think
she is.  Don't get me wrong, I like her as well, but... I felt compelled
to show the more 'feminine side' of Akane.  


Don
"Time flows like a river, and History repeats..." Secret of Mana