On Mon, 16 Sep 1996 00:49:06 -0500 (CDT) Nightelf wrote:
: Kurobara
:
: A work of anime fanfiction by Nicholas Leifker, aka "Nightelf"
: All rights reserved. I must ask that you not do anything with this work
: without the author's permission.
Um, is C&C all right? :)
: "When I went to the Tendo house, Ranma - the masculine Ranma - saved
: me from a dreadful fall. I...I fell in love with him." Something in
: Akari's look worries me... "A few days later, at the match, I ended up
: facing this pigtailed girl - who DARED use my Ranma-sama's name. So, not
: being above such measures, I chained her to Akane's pet."
Careful! Does Akari know about Ryouga being Akane's P-chan? I
don't think so.
: Katsunishiki rises, shaking the sand from his large frame. He
: straightens up, then bows deeply to me, impressed by my performance.
: Equally impressed, I return the favor.
:
: "Excellent job, Katsunishiki. You honor your mistress with your
: fighting skill."
:
: It's not often that a pig blushes. This one does - then bows just
: as deeply as before.
I'm not sure whether I can suspend my disbelief about hat pig
enough to include the fact that it perfectly understands human
speech and even has human reactions like blushing. Being
intelligent enough to give a decent fight - that I can accept.
: At the sound of the march, I step outside, into the full view of the
: congregation, my eyes aglow. A pristine white western-style wedding
: dress hugs my frame, accentuating my perfect curves. Never in my life
: have I looked so beautiful - or felt so alive. The audience stares at me
: with shock, awe, and perhaps envy, while Ranma...my Ranma-sama waits at
: the front, stunned at the embodiment of beauty that is myself.
Say, does Kodachi dream of Ranma *every* night - or is it just her
newfound knowledge of his curse that induces this?
: Oh, Sasuke - so loyal, so brave - and yet, so clueless. Still, at
: least he's better than the rest of the household...my idiot father...my
: obsessed brother...and me, the lunatic.
A highly fitting word, considering her nightly activities. A
lunatic in the ancient sense of the word.
: "Get out of here, Kodachi! You're the last person he wants to see!"
: "Aiyaaah! What you want, crazy girl?"
:
: I raise my hands in peace. A fight is the last thing I want right
: now...I would have a difficult time controlling my anger. "I desire no
: conflict. All I request is to see if Ranma is unhurt."
Ah, I was wondering what you would do when Ranma comes back from
China. The changes Kodachi went through were too great to let
this be a side-story that segues back into continuity at the end,
so I figured that the wedding would go a little different. Very
nice.
I enjoyed this story a lot. Your use of flowery prose for
Kodachi's narration perfectly fits her, and the introduction with
her running across the Nerima roofs was sheer poetry. What I am
not so sure about is whether seeing Ranma's change would really
shock her this much, even if she finally realized that his two
forms are one and the same person (she saw him change before,
after all). In fact, I somehow suspect that she would be more
intrigued than horrified. :)
Overall, a lovely character piece. I always liked the character
of Kodachi. She is so refreshingly crazy without any pretense
about it - unlike most of the other characters. :)
Sebastian
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