On Wed, 16 Oct 1996 21:37:36 -0500 (CDT) Sandborn said:
: This was supposed to be Part 3B but I changed the
: numbering to confuse myself.
And? Did you succeed? Or did you find out that trying to confuse
you is like trying to get the sea wet?
: Nabiki - New Horizons
: Pt. 4 - Sodoshi's Revenge
: by Uncle Fester
Well. I for one greet the end of the dark and convoluted Clan
Storyline. As I said before, I never really liked stories in
which the characters are pushed around by some ancient destiny.
It's perfectly okay with me, if they put and end to a blood feud
(or rather blood hunt, in this case) because that's what they
*decide* to do, saying "By golly, it's high time someone told
those Clan buggers to knock it off with all this murdering and
stuff." But if, on the other hand, they are only puppets for some
ancient monk, pulling the strings; Just actors, performing in a
long preordained play, the whole story loses a lot of interest for
me. Sorry.
Oh, BTW, I suspected that Sodoshi wouldn't survive the fic, when
she and Nabiki came to a sort of understanding in the cave - She
is just too dark and serious a character to hang around
permanently in the regular Ranma continuity. So I figured she
would finally get her revenge and die, just as Nabiki predicted.
I was intrigued that you used the guilt-enhancing fog to give
Ranma and Akane's relationship a push forwards. Will this
continue in the background of Nabiki's story?
You said you wanted to use the "chinese boy" line as a sort of
running gag, but you only repeated it once in this part, and that
looses some of its effect, since it is again Sato who says it. I
would work it into the first confrontation in front of the cave,
when Tougo taunts them and insults Ranma.
Anyway, not a lot of humour in this one, except for some pieces of
comic relief. You have a lot of catching up to do in part 5.
Sebastian