On Fri, 25 Oct 1996, bridget ellen engman wrote:

	Ranma would tell me to cut the poetic crap.

I really like this beginning.

	Thanks.

	"Thanks Nabiki!  It's so pretty!"  I stopped to look at myself in 
the mirror again.  "Do you think boys will like me?"

Well.  Not to go off on a feminist rant, but this is pretty thin 
characterization for a girl.  If we're talking like she has the personality
of *the girl who drowned there*, you might want to make that girl a
little more individual, instead of a collection of stereotypes.

	You catch on quickly.  Ranko is *meant* to come off like a collection 
of stereotypes at first...

Rant aside -- I really like the idea of this 

'fic, and you've done

some terrific things with it.  The personality-thing has been used before,
but never quite like this, and never showing the viewpoint of the
*other* (that I know of).  It's interesting how making the henshin
a separate personality seems to have moved Ranma and Akane's relationship
a bit farther than it is in the "real" story.  I also like how you use 
each "girl-change" (though I should hope you'd diverge from the manga 
eventually; there's a lot of potential for fun here...)

	Well, if you've seen a lot of the manga, you'll notice that quite 
a number of things changed in China, and yes things will tend to diverge 
more as time goes on.

Looking forward to the next part...

	Thanks!

SKJAM!