Whoof.  Maybe a bit too subtle; if I hadn't known it was a darkfic, I 
wouldn't have gotten it until the *very* end.  Maybe make it build a bit 
more with each one.  The details were, well, gory (how am I supposed to 
critique those?) but not quite clear enough; I was a bit confused as to 
*what* was snapping and *why* Akemi was making a mess.  

But I liked it.  I've been reading too much Mishima Yukio.

mata ne,
bengman

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