Subject: Re: C&C on your LEMON...
From: bastian@enterprise.mathematik.uni-essen.de (Sebastian Weinberg)
Date: 10/23/1996, 4:25 PM
To: Fanfiction ML

 On Tue, 22 Oct 1996 16:13:38 -0400 (EDT) WebDragon said:

: >Sorry, not too much action in this one.  I promise it will be the
: >same in part 2.  I'm not fond of in-detail descriptions of the
: >act - I just say what happens and let the reader figure the rest
: >out.  
: 
:         *DISAPPOINTED LOOK*

<raises eyebrow>


:         You don't have to do in-detail if you don't want to, but more detail
: would certainly be nice....  I go for in-detail, with feelings and
: sensations, but NOT overly vulgar.  You've read "Split Personalities", so
: you know what I don't like.....

Well, I'm not quite as upset over _Split Personalities_ as some. 
It's not the sex *per se* that angers me, but the fact that there
were a lot of great ideas in that fic that were systematically
sacrificed for the increasing volume of sex. :(


:         Overall, good storytelling that pulls the reader along with its
: flow....with humor sprinkled liberally throughout the story.

Thanks.  I wanted to do a humourous lemon-ish story that was not
actually *silly*.  A lot of Lemons seem to "apologize" for the
sexual contents by being bizarrely silly and unbelievable.  I
wanted this to be mainly a *story* whith some lemon and some
sillyness, but neither being the main factor.


: I liked this story, but it
: has NO tearjerker scenes in it!  BOO HOO!  I love reading tearjerkers...so
: then I can learn from their mistakes or good points - and "Namida no
: Okonomiyaki" is the result.  

Haven't seen that one, yet.  I'll go look for it in that giant
pile of fanfics I have lurking around on my harddisk.


:         So, Shampoo/Neko/Werecat looks like a human/cat hybrid?  With a tail
: too?  I dunno....I sorta prefer au naturelle (ie. Shampoo as she is, human,
: w/o clothing preferably).

Personally, I am no fan of Shampoo and she won't be treated too
kindly in part 2.


: Have Ranma turn into a girl.  Maybe Shapoo/neko/werecat would think twice
: about jumping all over Ranma-chan then....

She sure showed that with Kasumi, didn't she?  :P~~


: >There is a god-awful bilingual pun in this one, but you have to
: >know some German to see it.  Apologies to all who do - and you get
: >five bonus points from me for perceptiveness.
: 
:         I missed it.  What is it, o enlightened one?

I'm not quite sure whether I should drag this particular shaggy
dog out in the open.  I'll just say that it's a pun on a dirty
German phrase.  And it's really awful.


Sebastian
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