MD Price wrote:

OK... I have had several messages from people about
parts 13 and 14, and they fall into 2 categories:

1. I love it
2. I hate it

I fear I fall into category 2, about both parts.  Which is a shame,
because I really loved parts 1 through 12.  Parts 13 and 14 came off as
a bit rushed, a bit schizophrenic, a bit of "let's wrap everything up
right now".  Akari was dealt with in a perfunctory manner, Ryoga and
Ukyo got together very quick, and in general it was BAM Kuno and Nabiki
BAM Kuno Knows BAM Akari comes in BAM Ryoga tells her he doesn't love
her BAM Ryoga sleeps with Ukyo BAM Akari finds love elsewhere BAM...
BAM... BAM...

Add to that all the people acting out of character.  And I don't mean
acting out of RT character, but acting out of the characters you built,
too.  Parts of Chapter 14 actually made me wince, and that's *never*
happened to me in a Marisa Price story before.

Note that this has nothing to do with the pairings - I'm all for them. 
You're the only one who made Ryoga and Ukyo seem believeable.

Also, your attitude here confuses me.  You seem awfully closed to C&C. 
I mean, it's okay to ignore C&C - this is your story, your universe. 
But you shouldn't spend a lot of time justifying yourself, either.  It
makes you sound defensive.

Oh. There is going to be a focus on maritial arts
in the China section, and a lot less of a concentration
on relationships. 

This will be interesting.  The big appeal for me in LiL (and Ranma 1/2)
has always been the relationships.  I sure hope you can pull off the
transition to martial arts.  Frankly, written martial arts stories are
difficult to read and get into.  Still, you're the one person who might
pull it off.  :)

Why did I have Ranma be so wishy washy in Part XIII?
Because he totally fell apart in the last manga when
his hands were frozen with Saffron's goo and he
thought that Akane was dead. He also tweaked out
when he thought she was dead after he returned her
to human size. If you haven't read the final Ranma
manga, then you probably don't know what I mean, and
I suggest that you go to the Ranma Universe page
and read the manga synopsis.

There's a difference between him thinking Akane's dead, and him thinking
Akane's dying or hurt.  Whenever Akane's been threatened (and is alive),
he's always acted very decisively.

As always, if you really don't like the way the
story is going, I apologize. 

Don't apologize!  This is your story, what need do you have to
apologize?  Especially when you go off in the sentence after next and
thank those who give you praise - this makes us think that the apology
is not completely sincere.

Some help I need:

Can anyone tell me what Ranma and Ryouga's
attacks are? I need to know the names in
Japanese and what they basically are.

Where is Ukyou from again? Kyshu? (sp?)

A good place to see all this information is on the Ranma 1/2 FAQ (based,
curiously enough, in a server in England):

http://www.wot-club.org.uk/RanmaFAQ/

It is an *excellent* source of information.  I've found in invaluable in
helping me with my fanfics.

hugs to EVERYONE who has read it and commented,

Even me when I say nasty things?  :)

Marisa

-Richard