NURANMA: THE WHOLE THING
by Chris Schumacher
*Grammar: 7
*Story: 9 Excellent series
*Characters: 8.5 Very well done.
*Humor: 8 FUNNY STUFF! I Love the commercial breaks (even though he
kinda forced them near the end of Ep. 2.) Lots of jokes, like in Crys
Saga, you won't get them all.
Overall: 9 I love this new series. Incredible story, this fanfic, in my
opinion, is already a classic. I put this in the same cateogry as "Putting
Your Heart in the Right Place." Another great fanfic by Chris Schumacher.
One gripe is the use of cliches, but who cares? Everybody uses them, I use
them, he uses them, she uses them, everybody uses them.
RED
By Joseph Palmer
*Grammar: 7
*Story: 8
*Characters: 7 They were a bit OOC.
*Drama: 5
*Overall: 8 This was my first Joseph Palmer story I ever read. Now I know
why he is considered a great fanfic author. Palmer's use of symbolism with
the various colors were extremely effective yet simple. Palmer's writing
style is somewhat clear but understandable. A fine piece by Joseph Palmer.
Of course, there are no action, heavy melodrama, nor heavy slapstick
comedy, but if you have ten minutes to spare and in need of some
refreshment, go read this.
LOST MEMORIES EPOSIDE #1 ECLIPSE
by Entomorph
*Grammar: 5 You have a problem with capitalization and spelling. Not to
mention you misspelled Kasumi's name.
*Story: 6 Nothing so far. . . looks interesting, it probably gets better
in future eposides cuz it has the potential to do. (Unless you screw up
big time)
*Characters: 7 cliched dialougs, but it doesn't matter really.
*Overall: 6 Okay, it's the first eposide, and unless each epoisde is about
50 pages each, nothing happens in the first eposide. (Only fanfic that was
actually good on it's first epoisde was KOC) I have to see what happens in
future eposides. Oh, fix up the grammar.
RANMA 1/2: A REAL MAN II: CONSEQUENCES
by Fcasper
*Grammar: 6 "he fell tired" you mean felt tired? You also left out a few
commas and stuff, no big deal.
*Story: 7 Okay, it did have a story, but those lemon scenes were jsut
there for the sake of being just there. However, the lemon scenes gave a
somewhat acceptable alternative to make a boring plot, shall we say,
unboring?
*Characters: 7 This is a lemon story, they handled the correct way a lemon
characters supposed to be handled: OOC
*Lemon: 3 I don't know, a middle aged man and a teen is pretty sick. I
don't want to think about Happo. Other than that, the lemon scenes were
dry and boring. Of course, you said this was going to be a "R" rated not
an "X" rated fic.
*Overrall: 7 It still doesn't beat the orginal fanfic. It seems to me a
epilouge to the orginal with a few pages of lemon scenes tacked into it.
Not a fanfic to go out and look for, just a good read when you are bored.
Attention all ffml authors!! The first KOR fanfic AND the first VGAI
fanfic posted will automatically be read and critiqued. I want a good
fanfic, not something that was pasted together in 10 mintues. Of course,
if you hate the way I do my reviews (I know that I am not good at giving
accurate C&C) then don't write write it, or you can write it, just think of
this as a challenge.
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"Nothing can beat the music of hundreds of voices screaming in
unison!" - Kefka (Final Fantasy 6)
"The Reaper is always just a step behind me..." - Shadow (Final
Fantasy 6)
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"They love least that let them know their love, may say no to that
which they would have contrived I... I follow my love, into the
depth of hell itseeeeelllf!!" -Kuno Tatewaki (Ranma 1/2 Movie one)
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