So far, very good. You mentioned submitting this as a start to the novel
form or Ranma; this would certainly be worthy of it. However, keep in mind
the legalities of such a submission. Zen's excellent essay on the topic of
fanfics and legality would likely be required reading.
   On the other hand....so far, I'm a bit uncertain about the "Alternate
History" part of the title. It seems to be following the Anime/Manga
almost exactly. Will this branch off any time soon?
   Will be awaiting the next part :)

- Mike Loader
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