hi michael i just want to say a couple things about this fanfic 
well for starters i think that you don't need to say that the fanfic it's 
bad or without ideas i really liked the history tough i think that you 
need to explain more things in the history to me it seemed more like if 
you were remembering the history more that writing it you need to give 
more reasons for the characters to act like that i mean like in the 
beginning you should have showed nabiki sad before putting her to cry i 
think that nabiki crying just beacuse she was tricked well it's not really 
like her it would have been better if you had explained that it was like 
the to many straws in the camel i think that maybe she need to explain 
that she had a very bad day or something like that so everybody will 
belive her crying and well about the history i think that you only need to 
make it a little longer show more of what the characters are thinking and 
i think that the fanfic will be better if ranma showed a little more of 
interest in nabiki.
well just mi two cents keep going and don't give up i like the history :)

Tony

PD: And sorry about the spelling but my english isn't too good ^_^