THY INWARD LOVE PART II: FELT YET UNSPOKEN
by Richard Lawson 
*Grammar: 8
*Story: 7  It was a pretty boring story in this particular chapter, but
Richard saved it with his masterful storytelling.
*Characters: 8  The examining of Akane's relationship with Ranma is a
little unconvincing to me.  
*Humor: 3  That last few paragraphs took me by suprise.
*Overall:  7.5  Maybe if I read thie whole TIL, I would think it is
excellent like other people say, but this was not that excellent.  I think
Akane and Ranma went a little fast in their relationship in this chapter. 
The dialougs between Akane and Ranma were good but not great.  A little on
the cliched side.  But Richard's writing style is very nice.  Uh oh, I gave
one of Lawson's work under an 8.  People are going to flame me for
expressing my opinion.

DONNER
by Ed Sharpe
*Grammar: 6  I found basic errors, and the author needs to sharpen up on
his dialougs.
*Story: 6 This could have been a good story if the author excuted the
relationship between Skuld's two boyfriends a little better.  I would have
liked to see a more emotional goodbye.  Although the e-mail was a nice
touch.
*Characters: 7  It mainly focuses on Skuld, and she's portrayed nicely. 
Belldandy was portrayed as mindless and Urd was okay done.  Donner is
portrayed great.
*Humor: 4
*Lemon: 1  Near the beginning when they talked about sex...
*Overall: 6  First, the structuring is not so good.  It seemed choppy. 
Also, did Kenji appear in the author's other fics?  If he wasn't the author
should discribe Kenji a bit more.  I think the author should play with her
choice a little more,  wether to go with Donner or stay with Kenji.  It was
pretty obvious that she was going to stay, but I wanted her to go back.  If
I had known Kenji better and what she meant to Skuld.

A RANMA 1/2 "ELSEWORLDS 2--Lovers No More"
By John Walter Biles
*Grammar: 7  structuring is sorta weak, few typos, and Biles actually put
Conditioner instead of Cabinet.
*Story:  8  Very good story, excellent story.  Slow and uninteresting in
the beginning, but very good.
*Characters: 9  Oh man, the character development is soooo great in this. 
I love it, you are the man, John Biles.
*Humor: 8  Funny stuff like John Biles can only do.
*Overall:  9  This story reminded me of my Personalities story.  I did read
this, actually skimmed this before I wrote Personalites Too.  But I didn't
remember what it was about.  Now after I sat down and actually read it, it
sorta reminded me of Personalities Too.  However, this was much much
better.  I feel inferior.

KIMAGURE ORANGE COLLEGE EPOSIDE 4
by Andy Combs and the KOC gang.
*Grammar: 7  those use of camera angles were chessey
*Story:  8  Another great episode from KOC.  Kasuga makes a fool of himself
as always.
*Characters: 8  They were well portrayed.
*Overall: 7.5 Okay, this wasn't that great of an epoisde.  It had a good
story and stuff, but they took away Kimura as Kyosuke's other love
interest.  That probably hurt the plot a little, but there is also that
baseball player.  I still don't know the new characters except for Kimura. 
And I just didn't like this eposide as much as the other ones.

RANMA 1/2:  WICKED GARDEN
by Stefan "Twoflower" Gagne
*Grammar:  9
*Story:  9  Great dark fic... excellent.  Reminds me of my favorite anime
move, "Beautiful Dreamer."  
*Characters: 9 The Kuno's are not portrayed as idiots, Kodachi is featured
very well as a lunatic, and Tatewaki actually acts like a samouri.  The
other characters were weak, but it was not significant.  The portrayal of
Kodachi is very well done.
*Drama: 8  None of the jokes were funny, I knew this was going to be a dark
fic, and I read it with the attitute that it was going to be a darkfic. 
*Overall: 9  Great twisted story.  It makes me appreciate Kodachi a little
more with this fic, a great chilling fanfic. 


SUGAR AND SPICE AND...
By Christopher Willmore
*Grammar:  7
*Story:  7  not too terribly exciting story
*Characters: 8
*Overall:  7  You're not going to get a nobel literature prize by writing
about someone cooking in the kitchen unless you are a super writer, but
this served its purpose and it was pretty fun to read.







***************************************************************
"Nothing can beat the music of hundreds of voices screaming in
unison!" - Kefka (Final Fantasy 6)

"The Reaper is always just a step behind me..."  - Shadow (Final
Fantasy 6)

http://www.altered.com/yinyang/piccolo.html

"They love least that let them know their love, may say no to that
which they would have contrived I... I follow my love, into the
depth of hell itseeeeelllf!!"  -Kuno Tatewaki (Ranma 1/2 Movie one)
*******************************************************************