Subject: Re: [FFML] Two Twisted Fairy Tales
From: bastian@enterprise.mathematik.uni-essen.de (Sebastian Weinberg)
Date: 9/27/1996, 3:31 PM
To: Fanfiction ML
Reply-to:
bastian@enterprise.mathematik.uni-essen.de

 On Thu, 26 Sep 1996 00:16:15 -0500 (CDT) "Ranma Al'Thor" wrote:

: Princess Shan-pu and the faerie prince

:       The faerie ran away, as faeries do, and she chased the faerie back 
: to faerieland, across the eastern ocean.  She tried to hunt the faerie 
: girl, but the land was strange, and the local faeries tried to trick 
: her.  She met the faerie prince as his true male self, and fell in love 
: with him, but then learned he was the girl who had beaten her.  In 
: addition, he had been enslaved by three evil faeries.  A horrid 
: kawaiikune he could not beat in battle, a wicked chef who ate people, and 
: a deranged poison making faerie.  She tried to fight them, but they were 
: too strong for her.  She fled in despair, not knowing what to do.

Too fast, too fast!  This *seriously* has to be fleshed out more. 
As it stands, it reads like "Oh, I'll fast-forward to the good
bits now."


:       The evil chef agreed.  No one could make more evil flat food with 
: slime on it than her, so she thought she couldn't lose.  She made 
: hundreds of wheel shaped breads, coated with slime, fungus, toenails, 
: tampons, wombat fur, and snot.

Urrrrrh!  Goodbye lunch.  <smack smack> Gee, that sure tasted
better going down.


:       "Your life."  She threw the chef on her own griddle and cooked her, 
: then chopped her up and mixed her with the ramen to give it flavor, then 
: put it back in the box.

It's little touches like this, that tell you it's a children's
story.  :)


:       Finally, she confronted the evil kawaiikune faerie.  It was torturing 
: her sweet prince, as was its greatest pleasure.  She got out her charm 
: and turned into a cat, so she could sneak up on it.  When she got close, 
: her prince saw her coming to rescue him and was inspired.  The 
: berserkergang came over him and he attacked the evil kawaiikune and 
: ripped her apart.

Do I read this right as:  Shampoo goes to Ranma in cat form, while
he's quarreling with Akane;  Ranma sees Shampoo and goes into
cat-fist mode;  Ranma turns Akane into Kitty chowder.


: Clever Nabiki and the Ogres

: "Hey, there's an army out there!"  Everyone rushed to the window, and 
: Clever Nabiki switched breakfasts with Princess Tomboy.  
: 
:       Everyone came back to the table and laughed.  They could hardly 
: believe Clever Nabiki could have been so stupid as to mistake the passing 
: merchant for an army.  Everyone ate breakfast and Princess Tomboy dropped 

Hmmm.  I don't like it, even for a twisted fairy tale.  Also, with
her own cooking, Princess Tomboy would have developed a resistance
to toxins.

Also, I miss any references to Nabiki's photos of Ranma.


OK, now that the C&C is out of the way:

BWAAAAAHAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAA!!!!

<Gasp, wheeze, ROTF>  Muahahahahaa!


Sebastian (The Kumquat Fairy is next, right?)
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