On Wed, 25 Sep 1996 22:26:45 -0500 Richard Lawson said:
: Adam Barnes wrote:
: >
: > You also mention when Ukyo finds Ranma in the cave, that he is in girl
: > form, and Ukyo thinks this is strange because she didn't think it had
: > been raining. So why WAS Ranma in girl form?
:
: Well, I didn't want to spell it out, but Ranma was pretty disgusted with
: what he thought he did as a guy, so he turned himself female. In a way
: he was acting like his father; using his cursed form to hide from his
: problems.
And I think you *shouldn't* spell it out. Not everything has to
be obvious. A little subtlety and undertones make a fanfic good.
: Also, I thought I did make it clear in the cave that no sex happened.
: Ukyo tells Ranma in no uncertain terms that sex did not happen. At
: least, I thought it was clearly spelled out. If you read that scene, do
: you still have problems discovering that they didn't have sex?
Hmmm, perhaps you should add a little horrified introspection on
Ukyou's part, when she hears what Ranma thinks has happened. You
could have her thinking, "Oh my god! I just went on with my day,
because I knew that nothing happened - and all this time he was
going through hell with guilt." That could lead to some
self-doubt about her own behavior, a la "Why did I *conveniently*
not realize what was happening? Am I really that starved for
affection, that I would allow Ranma to sleep in my bed? And now he
has been suffering, because of my selfishness."
On the other hand, you take Ukyou's dark mood into a different
direction (Ukyou the doormat, who always tries to make others
happy), so you can disregard that second suggestion.
Sebastian