On Wed, 25 Sep 1996, Adam Barnes wrote:

Richard Lawson wrote:

Nightelf wrote:

I had a real problem with the "one-night stand" between Ranma and Ukyou.
I have a difficult time accepting all the little coincidences - both of
them being too out of it to realize who they're doing it with, Ranma
getting kicked out of the house, only to end up at Ucchan's rather than
elsewhere, etc.  Problem is, since this act sets the stage for the rest
of the story, it tends to put a taint on the rest of the work.

Er... You do realize that nothing happened, don't you?  They didn't have
sex - Ranma was just so hard up (so to speak) that he had a dream about
having sex with Akane, and when he woke up next to Ukyo, he thought he'd
done it with her.

I think you need to make that clearer. I wasn't sure myself.

	I also found it a bit unclear.  Part of the problem, I think, is 
that the entire story is told from Ukyou's perspective (except for the 
dojo flashback).  But if the dream didn't happen, then it means that, for 
that single scene, you had to switch to Ranma viewpoint, which might be a 
little jarring.
	Personally, I think it'd be really interesting if the whole thing 
was left very ambiguous - maybe they _did_ have sex, accidentaly, and 
Ukyou knows this, but pretends it didn't happen to clear Ranma's guilty 
conscience.
 

You also mention when Ukyo finds Ranma in the cave, that he is in girl
form, and Ukyo thinks this is strange because she didn't think it had
been raining. So why WAS Ranma in girl form?

	I'm assuming it's so he can let his emotions out.
	Oh, and by the way, I enjoyed the story - not as much as the 
Ryoga/Akari story (livestock disease argument aside), which seemed to 
have a more refined edge to it - but still good.
	I'll hafta read it again to gice half-decent C&C, though.

	-Mike