Not too bad ... hmmm, Shampoo should have been tortured more ... and
you should probably change the 'bomb' to be the exploding okonomiyaki
and exploding nikuman things... And have Ukyou beaten up, too... Hmm.
Maybe you should write the scene where Ranma dies, too ... show sort
of what's going on with him, like if he lets all of his hatred go, the
only thing that was keeping him alive until that moment?

Kun-chan...