Here are some more C&C.....  return get I in like any.


ROYAL                                                             
by PhoneyNT
*Grammar: 7
*Story:  8 Pretty amusing little story...
*Characters:  8  Nice way how you handled the characters.  But I'm getting
another pet peeve, and I do this to my fics also so I have to blame myself
too.  Why do Kasumi say, "Oh my."  in every single fics?  I know she says
that, but in some fics, it is used 230 times in one paragraph.
*Humor: 6 Not funny really, but it is an amusing type of humor.
*Overall:  7.5  I liked it, not heavy duty but light and simple.  However,
the last part is too... I don't know how to say it, but I would of wanted a
little more subtle.

RANMA 1/2 THE NEW ARRIVAL CHAPTER 1
by David Lee
*Grammar:  7  A few grammar mistakes
*Story: 6  Oh gee, another author in fic.  This was too short to see if it
was interesting.
*Characters:  7  The mom sounded like my mom.  David's thought of his mother
was so simliar to mine, it was scary.  Other than that, the other characters
were handled the Ranma movie was I thought.
*Overall:  5.6  score cuz this chapter had no plot, but that's normal for
chapter 1.  It introduces the setting, which it does.  Oh, here what this
fic sounds like.... ahem, I hope I do this right.
Koniichiwa, Ranma desu.  Boku wa ni languages at the same time hanasu.  It
wa Japenglish desu.
If you going to put Japanese phrases, translate them.
"Ranma! Atashi mo anta no koto ga suki wa yo"  what does that mean?  Also,
like I did with the sentence above, don't mix Japanese with English!! IT
drives me crazy!!!




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"Nothing can beat the music of hundreds of voices screaming in
unison!" - Kefka (Final Fantasy 6)

"The Reaper is always just a step behind me..."  - Shadow (Final
Fantasy 6)

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"They love least that let them know their love, may say no to that
which they would have contrived I... I follow my love, into the
depth of hell itseeeeelllf!!"  -Kuno Tatewaki (Ranma 1/2 Movie one)
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