: How about making a real ending? That is rather ... pathetic.
: 
: At the moment it looks like you've said, "Hmm, the sex it over. Let's
: close it up ASAP - I can't be bothered any more." And you chucked in
: the above, and sent it out. That rather spoiled the whole thing. If
: you'd have put an ending like the setting up, although it's just a lemon
: and there wasn't exactly much setting up, it would have been better than
: *that* ending...

Um, Kun-chan... This is *part 1*.  You're right that the ending of
this part was rather abrupt, but it doesn't need a *real* ending,
because there is more to come.

Yes, but my fics are also part 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6 and 7 ... If I ended my
parts like that, people probably wouldn't bother with the next one...
Maybe if it had 'part 1a' and '1b', so you can be sure that that's not
*THE* ending for that whole fic, one could excuse it ... but it's rather
pathetic as it stands ... It looks *just* like 'oh, the sex is over. 
Who'd want to read a read ending? I should write the next part for more
sex' or something... ^^;;;

Kun-chan...