On Sat, 14 Sep 1996, Nightelf wrote:
 

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A SPECIAL NOTE TO OUR TEXAN READERS: No part of the state of Texas is
portrayed in this fic. Me no Alamo, guys.
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BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA*cough,cough*

Do you realize how horrible the sound of a hysterical laugh from a man 
with a cold is?

Far better than the sound of a man with the stomach flu. :P
 

Overall, it looks good.  The psychiatrist scene seemed rather dull, but 
the other parts were okay.  

BTW, have you considered changing the names in the "non-Texas" scene 
around a bit, to more "familiar" forms (i.e. John-Walt)?   ;)

I didn't know there _were_ familiar forms of those sort of names.
   Seriously, Muccawinna isn't based on Texas. Instead, it's based on a
small northern Nevada town I bear a deep grudge against.

Phone: (hesitantly) Hi...you probably don't remember, but you held 
me prisoner and threatened me with torture unless I became your 
concubine a few weeks back...anyway, what are you doing next 
Saturday?

And I thought I was desperate.  Seriously, if I were seriously getting on 
OOC case here, I don't know of anyone in their right mind who would go 
out with anyone who had done that to them.  A sick, twisted part of me 
(yes, that same sick, twisted part of me that wrote "Black Lemonade" and 
is going to finish "Kurobara" tonight) wants to scream,"GO FOR TSUBASA!!!
IT'LL CUT DOWN ON CLOTHES COSTS!!!"  

Ah, but since Ukyo wears _men's_ clothes, it wouldn't. ;)
   On the whole Tsung thing....yeah, in RL or a serious fic she wouldn't.
But as Jim-Bob might say, "We don't go fer reality round these parts,
stranger". The Ukyo/Tsung bit was a one-shot gag....they aren't getting
together, trust me.

(picture of Ukyou-Tsubasa love scene enters Nightelf's mind, causing said 
poor fool to run to the bathroom before tossing his cookies.)

Uh...forget I said that.

With pleasure. Ugh......think I'll run for the bathroom meself......

- Mike of No Particular Title or Handle
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Nicholas Leifker, aka "Nightelf"
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"He's so beautiful when he's unconscious."
-Kodachi Kuno, "Kurobara"
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