It's okay.  I didn't quite like the oversaturation of dialogue in 
comparison to description and thoughts, but what was done was done well.

Usagi and Ako?  Ohmy...

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Nicholas Leifker, aka "Nightelf"
nwl9354@tam2000.tamu.edu
"He's so beautiful when he's unconscious."
-Kodachi Kuno, "Kurobara"
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