Hmmm.

I like it.  The descriptions perhaps need a little more refinement, to 
get rid of a few awkward bits, but overall, the story looks great.  I 
look forward to the next installment.
  
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Nicholas Leifker, aka "Nightelf"
nwl9354@tam2000.tamu.edu
"He's so beautiful when he's unconscious."
-Kodachi Kuno, "Kurobara"
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