On Tue, 10 Sep 96 03:18:07 -0700 Henry J. Cobb said:
: Normally I don't send out negative C&C publicly, but this is such a nice
: story, I'd thought I'd make an exception.
It is, for that matter.
: The use of "First person present" here is brilliant, brilliantly wrong.
: Instead it slumps to a subsidence. There is no scenery, no action,
: simply remembrance. All life is drained from the characters (is there
: really a main character? If so, what are their mannerisms?) drop by
: drop. By the time of the confrontation, I don't care what happens to
: the faceless "I" of this story. Whoever it is, they are a total
: stranger to me.
Sadly, I have to admit that I felt exactly the same. I *wanted*
to enjoy the story, because the *plot* was nice, but the style
just left me listless and uninvolved.
Oh, and apart from that, everything happens to fast and needs to
be fleshed out more; *Particularly* the events at the "Challenge".
Sebastian