George Mori wrote:

At 09:49 AM 9/10/96 -0400, you wrote:

WARNING: This story contains frank and rather crude discussion
of sexual promiscuity and other wrongful behavior.  Parts of it
may be quite offensive.  You'd better not read it . . .

        That's not the worst of the problems not by a LONGSHOT!

        Now normally I'm a constructive C & C er focusing on the good. Well,
your grammar was decent, and umm.... that's about it.

        I'm also not one to wave the OOC flag, but sory you're asking for
it. Now while this started out as a basic Lemon, having Ranma being a
superplayboy isn't him in ANY way. He is shy around the opposite sex in
general. Also WHERE DID YOU GET THE IDEA OF HAVING RANMA BE A DRUG ADDICT?
COME ON! This is the one that really killed it. Ranma may drink on occasion
but he doesn't do drug, there is no reason for him to and it really detracts
from the fic.
        The treatment of Kasumi, and Ukyo was downright cruel, I'm sorry.
You should be shot for that. Nabiki was treated a bit better, but please.
        I think the underlying message that came out in the end has a bit of
merit I suppose, but in ligght of the fic it loses impact since having Ranma
being a druggie, doesn't put him in any good light. The fic could improve
greatly by removing the drugs and knocing off the hundreds of sexual
encounters alluded to.

I think this was the best part.  It kind of showed that even the worst 
sexual deviant, drug addict and jerk could reform and come to some kind 
of honorable ends.  To be an honorable man.  The shear ridiculesness of 
it kept you interested until the end where the point was made.  True, the 
drug thing annoyed me two.  I haven't had contact with drugs, but my 
friends have, and its not a laughing matter....

HAYES

P.S. This wasn't really that sexual in the traditional way.  Its as if it 
wasn't writen to turn people on, just tic them off.