| Subject: [Comment] [AKO] "Promise", Chapter One. |
| From: tlsbtn@ix.netcom.com (Trisha Lynn Sebastian) |
| Date: 9/10/1996, 9:11 PM |
| To: fanfic@fanfic.com |
I know this is a little late, but it's very hard to tell who is thinking what. If you put brackets or the < > signs around the thoughts, then moved them closer to the text concerning the person, it might help. ex. "Something's going wrong," A-ko said. <Could it be B-ko again?> You get the point. Foxtrot the Furryous, BTFH