On Mon, 9 Sep 1996 raphael@asu.edu wrote:
: Okay, here's part four of my little story! Response to last edition
: was kind of tepid, so hopefully this installment should be interesting
: enough to warrant some response.
Ooooh, it was!
: As I stated in the beginning, response to my last posting was tepid at
: best. Do you guys want to see this story finished?
YES! Keep 'em coming!
: I don't know very much about Principal Kuno at all, and have had to go
: from what I've heard and what P-Word sent me (thanks!). If I'm doing
: Principal out of character, please let me know (specific details will
: help) so that I can fix it in the rewrite.
Nah, he seems pretty much in character. It's not so hard to keep
him IC, since he isn't really a major player in the Manga. :)
: Okay, next: Noriko's moves. I think they're a bit outlandish for the type
: of story this is, and for the type of person Noriko is. Still, I couldn't
: resist the temptation of having my main character know journalism-style
: martial arts. Any comments?
It was pretty cool. Although it only utilized the tools of a
*writer*. Except the glue, there was nothing journalism-*specific*
about it. But don't get the wrong idea - I loved that scene.
: Also, Noriko's dilemma isn't coming out quite the way I want it to. It
: seems a bit forced right now, but it's important that she have a real
: dilemma to deal with. Any ideas (Zen, Travis, Mike...anyone?)?
No, no. The dilemma you show is quite all right - it's just
underutilized. After only very short soul-searching, she decides
to follow the honourable path and research the subject. I'd have
her put it off until later, and find excuses why she just can't do
it right away. :) Then she sees the photos and is *forced* to
accept that she did wrong, and her journalistic integrity won't
allow her to ignore the truth when it's thrust into her face.
: And some people have wrote me commenting that I shouldn't use so many
: add-in characters as it detracts from the Ranmaverse. Well, I wish I
: could have done this without having to create a single character (well,
: except Noriko; I'm starting to take a liking to my main character :P),
: but the more I thought, the more I needed more add-ins to flesh out the
: story. I tried to put "real" Ranma characters where I could, but there
: came a certain point where it stretched credibility to put an
: already-established character in there (I'm particularly pleased at
: Gosunkugi-the-photographer). Any ideas on reducing add-ins?
Just tell those busybodies to buzz off. The original Manga added
new people *all the time*, often only for one single story arc.
Your characters are fully realized, well motivated, and original
(i.e. not simple self-insertion). If anyone has a problem with
that, it's decidedly *their* problem, not yours.
: So, in conclusion, send me comments of all sorts about this installment!
: Please! It's what keeps me writing. Thanks all for listening to me
: babble, and have a good night!
You want comments? Stop begging and *write*! I'm getting
impatient, already. :)
Sebastian