At 07:00 AM 9/4/96 -0400, you wrote:

At 01:32 AM 9/4/96 -0500, you wrote:

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universe.  Anyway, at least I didn't make her prostitute as she is in faaaar
too many lemons. 

        What?   Which lemons?

2. Language.  The foul language used in the 'fic was not only out of 
character for the characters, but was excessive and distracting from the 
overall story.  There are two English words that I avoid like the plague 
when writing 'fics, and those words were used excessively here. 

       Actually, you have a point here, I sent the WRONG BLOODY VERSION
OUT! I'd toned down the swearing a hell of a lot. (still has swearing, not
nearly as much, and not nearly as many uses of the F-word.) Man I feel
stupid. = (  Should I post the REAL version again? Oy, never post without
sufficient caffiene. 

        Hmmm..I don't see that kinda language with Ranma & Co...perhaps
in Japanese?

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|    Otaku Gamers Unite               "He's the kind of kid that    |
|    Frustrated RPGers Unite           has to get rid of stress     |
|      Setzer of \/ane                 or go into sexual crimes."       |
|        -=UDIC=-                                - Maison Ikkoku            |
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Venkarel
(who sees another fic that she wishes she had time
to read...ahh...the joys of moving across the country
just when the fanfics start pouring in)