An interesting little story. Liked it. :) Reminded me a little bit of
Twoflower Gagne's "Money".
   The flow is a bit uneven at times; Hemingway syndrome is also present.
You might want to try reciting the piece out loud in order to find the
blocky parts.

   "Great, what am I gonna do now?  I have GOT to get out of here!"
Ranma looked across the plain, once again seeing nothing.  <I'm all
alone out here.> thought Ranma, a slight feeling of panic rising in
him.  <There's no one to help me.  Noone to talk to.>  He could feel

                                    ^^^^^
   It figures that Peter would be hanging around hell. And he didn't even
lift a finger to help Ranma escape. How disgustingly typical.

- Mike of No Particular Title or Handle 
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