On Fri, 30 Aug 1996, Doug Murphy wrote:

I know a few people that are like that with cats. They continuosly brush their 
hair, feed them better than they feed themselves, ETC. PLEASE say your not 
going to give Ranma this humiliation!

	No, but it was getting close....

	"Where is my Shampoo?  Tell me or I'll--"  Ranma was glowing.  A 
buildup of ki like that could be very dangerous.

	

Hmm, maybe more descriptions here. Show JUST how powerful he was becoming and 
that he has the power to mangle everyone in sight if he doesn't see his cute 
little kitty! Maybe mention the colors. (blue would be my fav' but that sacred 
color is reserved for good guy/bad guy battles!) Man I'm sounding a lot like 
my Acting teacher...

	Hmm, perhaps.  We'll see what I can come up withy

	She tried to comfort herself.  Obviously, the potion had messed 
up Ranma's mind worse than she'd thought.  How he'd thought of her cat 
form must be how he thought of her human form when he was normal.  He 
just couldn't show it because Akane would beat on him even worse.  Yes, 
that had to be it.

Are you trying to say that he is completely scared of her or that he now 
adores her like his 'precious kitty'? If he now likes her I would like to know 
how she figured this out from the scene that she had just watched.

	Oops, this should have been in first person thoughts like the 
rest... And actually, she isn't deriving this from the scene she's 
hearing; she's in her own little world at that moment.  

	"Ryouga tired just being pet to Akane, yes?  Shampoo maybe 
have plan..."

Good ending! Leaves it open for a sequal! Now you owe us a debt, I consider 
this ending a promise that you will now do a fic where Shampoo tries to help 
Ryouga get Akane! (well maybe not a promise but a good idea and you must write 
it! ;)

	maybe, some day.

gain godlike powers before supper..." from _Confessions of a Modest Otaku_

Hah! Send me this Confessions if you have it handy. Seems like something I 
would like to read.

	My actual self-insertion story will run when I run out of 
everything else (as I suspect it will be the least popular...)

SKJAM!